The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.
The chart depicts the percentage of expenditure spent by adults and
children
on various things like
Food
, Electronic
equipment
,
Music
and
Videos
in London in 2015.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent, that teens, girls and boys had an increment in expenditure throughout the period and the young adults and elders had decreased their expenses.
To begin
with, it is clearly apparent, that Men and Women had the highest expenses in the
Food
category, 30% and 39% but by that time their expenditures were falling down to different categories like Electronic
equipment
,
Music
and
Videos
. Men with 21%, 5%, 2% and Females with 7%, 2% and 0.5%.
Likewise
, Elders
also
had downwards in every category,
Food
, Electronic
equipment
,
Music
and
Videos
with around 28%, 15%, 4% and 2%.
In addition
,
children
and teens had higher budgets for every single item,
Besides
that
Children
and Boys have similar spending.
Children
with 11%, 35%, 41% and 15% and Boys 9%, 28%, 36% and 20%.
However
, Girls have claimed
second
Correct article usage
the second
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highest place in expenditure on
Music
and
Videos
with 38% and 16%
lastly
, the second
least
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lowest
show examples
expenses are for
Food
and Electronic
equipment
at around 11% in both categories.
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