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The table below shows the numbers of same day and overnight stays in public and private hospitals in 5 Australian states for last year. The pie chart below shows percentages of same day and overnight stays in public and private hospitals in the same 5 Australian states.

The table below shows the numbers of same day and overnight stays in public and private hospitals in 5 Australian states for last year. The pie chart below shows percentages of same day and overnight stays in public and private hospitals in the same 5 Australian states.
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The illustrated table and pie
chart
displays
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 the numbers and
and
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percentages respectively of
same day
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same-day
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 and overnight stays in public and private hospitals in the five Australian states. We can clearly see from the table that
huge
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 amount of stays are taken by the public hospitals in all states and New South Wales is a major one. The pie
chart
 shows that private overnights are the smallest one
comparing
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 to others. The table
represents
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shows
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 that
two third
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two-thirds
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 of all the stays have two states, which is New South Wales and Victoria with
total
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a total
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 stays of fifteen thousand. Only a small proportion of stays in the country is taken by South Australia with 2200 and Western Australia has
bit
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 more with 2552. The pie
chart
 represents four causes, with private overnight representing the smallest proportion at just more
that
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than
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 one
tens
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. Public overnight and Public same day constitute
three fifth
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 of all the
chart
 with equally thirty per cent each.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 5 times.
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