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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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It is a human tendency to abruptly judge the personality of an individual on the initial encounter with them. In
this
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 I will be discussing the benefits
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 the
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 of
this
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 human nature. Talking about the advantages,
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 human instinct can be helpful in a dangerous
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. Human beings a born with an innate survival mechanism, which kicks in during a life-threatening
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 and can help avoid
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 circumstances.
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, if an individual encounters a
shady looking
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person
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 on a lonely street at night and decides to change the street sensing a dangerous
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, he might have probably averted a bad event for himself.
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, it has been rightly said that the first
impression
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 is the
last
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impression
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.
This
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 quote holds true during job interviews. The way an individual presents himself on the first encounter
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 leaves a lasting
impression
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 on the perception and judgement of the employer.
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, a recent
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 article showed
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 people who were
well dressed
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 and had good communication skills, increased their job acceptance chances by 40%.
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, the
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quote
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 “
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 judge a book by its cover”, holds true in various situations. It is a known fact that every
person
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 suffers from some form of social anxiety
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 during the initial meeting with an unknown
person
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. Anxiety can make a
person
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 vulnerable to lower confidence levels and degrade one’s communication skills, which in turn can leave a bad initial
impression
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 on the other
person
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. But once these same people meet multiple
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 and become familiar with each other, the anxiety gradually decreases and the confidence level improves.
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, if one encounters
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 ill
person
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, he is not able to express himself well and is
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 considered a rude
person
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. But interacting with
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 unwell
person
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 would help him communicate his bad
situation
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 and
this
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person
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 would be probably judged in a different way. In conclusion, judging someone instantly on their first encounter can have
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its
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 own pros and cons depending on various circumstances.

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introduction
Try to provide a clear thesis statement in your introduction that directly addresses the prompt. This will enhance the clarity of your position from the beginning.
task response
Remember to maintain a balance between the advantages and disadvantages in your discussion by allocating equal development to each. This balance is essential for a fully developed argument.
cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to increase cohesion between your ideas and paragraphs. While your essay is well-structured, varying your connectors can improve readability and flow.
grammar
Proofread your essay to correct minor grammatical errors and typo. While these errors don't significantly impact readability, polishing your language use can contribute to a higher score.
supporting examples
Effective use of real-life examples to support your points strengthens the argument and makes it more relatable.
structure
Good structural organization contributes to the overall coherence and cohesiveness of the essay.
balance
You’ve done well to discuss both sides of the argument, which is key to fully addressing the essay prompt.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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