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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the average
price
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 changes of
Copper
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,
Nickel
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, and
Zinc
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 for 12 months in 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that expect
Zinc
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 all two metal sources' average prices decreased over a year in 2014, and
Nickel
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 experienced a drastic decline among those two other sources. First of all, in January the
Nickel
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 had the highest
price
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 in comparison to
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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, with 6% in average
price
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 and it saw a dramatic 5% drop in
price
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 by March. In the next 2 months, it had a plateau movement,
then
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 it was faced with another 4% decrease by Jun which was the lowest amount among those others.
However
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, After growth in the next month, its
price
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 was at the same level for three months
then
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 with a skyrocket surge the
Nickel
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 reached its level in December where it was the same In April, about 1% which was the lowest amount in comparison to
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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. Second of all,
although
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Zinc
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 in January had the lowest
price
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 at 1%,
at the end
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 of the year it reached to peak of 2% in total.
Also
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,
Zinc
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 from February to June experienced a gradual 4% decline and after a minor growth in July, it levelled off in October. From October to December
Zinc
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 saw a dramatic rise and reached 2% in
price
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.
Also
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,
Copper
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 after a fluctuating movement between -1% to 1% from February to November, reached about 1.5% in total.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, zinc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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