The chart Below gives information about how families in one county spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

The chart Below gives information about how families in one county spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
The bar chart below depicts the the number of proportions of income spent on
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in 1968 and 2018 in a country.
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, in 1968 families spent most of their income on food.
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2018 the highest expenditure
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leisures. And in both years the lowest spending was
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to
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fuel and power.
To begin
with, in 1968 families spent
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of 35
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their
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income on food but, in 2018 it had a considerable decline that reached under 20
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. In 1968 people spent 10
percent
on housing
while
in 2018 it jumped to around 19
percent
. Fuel and power in 1968 was 4 and in 2018 had a small drop that reached 4
percent
. Clothing and
footware
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footwear
in 1968 was 10
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that in 2018 had a
noteable
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notable
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fall which came to 5
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.
Houshold
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Household
goods in both years
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at the same amount of less than 10
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. Personal goods in 1968
was
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around 8
percent
then
in 2018 considerably decreased to under 5
percent
. In 1968 the
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on
ttransport
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transport
was fewer than 10 but in 2018 dramatically increased to 14
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. And
lastly
, in 1968 expenditure on leisure
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was
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around 9
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but in 2018 had a
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increase that reached over 20
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Budget allocation
  • Consumer spending
  • Expenditure trends
  • Historical comparison
  • Economic context
  • Inflation adjustments
  • Financial priorities
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spendings
  • Essential necessities
  • Luxury items
  • Technological advancement
  • Income distribution
  • Fiscal habits
  • Societal norms
  • Budgeting differences
  • Monetary trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Spending categories
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