The chart Below gives information about how families in one county spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
The bar chart below depicts the the number of proportions of income spent on
diffirent
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different
thing
in 1968 and 2018 in a country.
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things
Overall
, in 1968 families spent most of their income on food. While in
2018 the highest expenditure Correct word choice
In
is depend
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depended
to
leisures. And in both years the lowest spending was Change preposition
on
depend
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dependent
to
fuel and power.
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on
To begin
with, in 1968 families spent average
of 35 Add an article
an average
percent
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per cent
their
income on food but, in 2018 it had a considerable decline that reached under 20 Change preposition
of their
percent
. In 1968 people spent 10 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
on housing while
in 2018 it jumped to around 19 percent
. Fuel and power in 1968 was 4 and in 2018 had a small drop that reached 4 percent
. Clothing and footware
in 1968 was 10 Correct your spelling
footwear
percent
that in 2018 had a Change the spelling
per cent
noteable
fall which came to 5 Correct your spelling
notable
noticeable
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Houshold
goods in both years Correct your spelling
Household
was
at the same amount of less than 10 Change the verb form
were
percent
. Personal goods in 1968 Change the spelling
per cent
was
around 8 Change the verb form
were
percent
then
in 2018 considerably decreased to under 5 percent
. In 1968 the spend
on Replace the word
spending
ttransport
was fewer than 10 but in 2018 dramatically increased to 14 Correct your spelling
transport
percent
. And Change the spelling
per cent
lastly
, in 1968 expenditure on leisure wae
around 9 Correct your spelling
was
percent
but in 2018 had a Change the spelling
per cent
highly
increase that reached over 20 Change the adverb
high
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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