the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart gives information about how much of the percentage of individuals who decided to
drink
various types of
coffee
or
tea
in five cities in Australia in the
last
four
weeks
.
Firstly
, the chart shows a considerable percentage of
people
who
drink
coffee
or
tea
in a café in the
last
four
weeks
. Significant lovers of
coffee
in
café
s live in Melbourne, approximately 64 per cent of
citizens
. Next are the
people
of Hobart, where 63 per cent of individuals
drink
coffee
in the café.
Then
, the
citizens
of Sydney decided to
drink
coffee
or
tea
in a café, and more than
half
of the
citizens
fan drinking
tea
or
coffee
in a café. Only in Adelaide fewer than
half
of the
people
decided to
drink
coffee
or
tea
in a café.
Secondly
, the chart shows the number of
people
who have had fresh or instant
coffee
in the
last
four
weeks
. More than
half
of the
citizens
of Hobart and Brisbane decided to buy instant
coffee
in the previous
four
weeks
,
whereas
less than
half
of Adelaide, Melbourne, and Sydney chose to buy instant
coffee
.
However
,
citizens
of Sydney and Melbourne bought fresh
coffee
nearly
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half
of individuals in the
last
four
weeks
, and the other three city
citizens
decided to have fresh
coffee
just under a third. In conclusion, the vast majority percentage of
citizens
in Australia have chosen to go to a café for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
four
weeks
.
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