The three pie charts provide information about the percentage of degrees granted in terms of four different professions at the National University over the period in question.

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degrees in four sciences. It was computer

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, medicine, business and law. In 20 years period. In my opinion, computer

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very interesting since

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of students increased

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15%

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20 years.

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shows the least level of improvement

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that time.

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professionals increased about 5% from 1990 to 2010.

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holders decreased

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% from 1990 to 2010. In conclusion, the world going to computer

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words science with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

95 words

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percentages
professions
industry demands
societal trends
gender distribution
equality
persistent gender gaps
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employment challenges
technological advancements
economic conditions
policy changes
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