The three pie charts provide information about the percentage of degrees granted in terms of four different professions at the National University over the period in question.
This
illustrations
shows Change the determiner
illustration
informations
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information
pieces of information
of
degrees in four sciences. It was computer Change preposition
on
science
, medicine, business and law. In 20 years period.
In my opinion, computer science
was
very interesting sinceWrong verb form
has been
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the
number
of students increased Change the article
a number
the number
about
15% Change preposition
by about
up to
20 years. Change preposition
over
Whereas
, the
law Correct article usage
apply
science
shows the least level of improvement among
that time.
Change preposition
at
While
medical science
professionals increased about 5% from 1990 to 2010.
On the other hand
, business science
holders decreased 15
% from 1990 to 2010.
In conclusion, the world going to computer Change preposition
by 15
science
and technology as we know
.Correct pronoun usage
know it
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