You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
The bar chart illustrates the estimated percentage of
literacy
in the world for the
last
year by specifying the
region
and gender. Among all regions, South Asia and
Arab
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the Arab
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States have the highest
literacy
rate
in male education with more than 50
percent
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per cent
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While
the former
region
has the highest percentage in female education as well with more than 30%.
Along with
this
,
Sub-Saharan
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the Sub-Saharan
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Africa
region
has around 30%
literacy
rate
in female education in the
last
year. on the other side, there are only developed countries which have
literacy
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a literacy
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rate
of less than 5% for both genders in the previous year. The chart depicts that
literacy
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the literacy
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rate
is significantly
much more
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higher
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in
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for
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female
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females
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in most of the regions
such
as East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia.
While
in Latin America and in developed countries, there is a minor difference in
literacy
rate
between men and women that reflects gender equality in
these
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this region
these regions
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region
.
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