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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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The bar chart illustrates the estimated percentage of
literacy
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 in the world for the
last
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 year by specifying the
region
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 and gender. Among all regions, South Asia and
Arab
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the Arab
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 States have the highest
literacy
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rate
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 in male education with more than 50
percent
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per cent
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While
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 the former
region
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 has the highest percentage in female education as well with more than 30%.
Along with
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this
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,
Sub-Saharan
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the Sub-Saharan
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 Africa
region
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 has around 30%
literacy
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rate
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 in female education in the
last
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 year. on the other side, there are only developed countries which have
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literacy
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a literacy
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rate
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 of less than 5% for both genders in the previous year. The chart depicts that
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literacy
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the literacy
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rate
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 is significantly
much more
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higher
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in
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for
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female
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females
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 in most of the regions
such
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 as East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia.
While
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 in Latin America and in developed countries, there is a minor difference in
literacy
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rate
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 between men and women that reflects gender equality in
these
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this region
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region
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, region, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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