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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts provide information about how
water
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 is used
in
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 6
continent
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 for different uses. From the chart, in 4 areas the
water
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 is used most in
agricultural
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 and in 2 regions
most
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water
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 used aspect is industrial
use
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, South
America
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, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia used more than 70% of
water
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Agricultural
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, but Industrial and domestic only used below 10% of
water
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 except 2 countries. South
America
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 used 19% of
water
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 in Domestic and
South East
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Southeast
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 Asia used 12% of
water
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 in industrial
use
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, the 2 countries which
used
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 most of their
water
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on
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 industrial are North
America
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 and Europe. But these 2 countries used their
water
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most
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the most
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 balanced way. North
America
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 used 48% of
water
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in
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 industrial
use
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, 39%
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 Agricultural
use
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 and 13%
in
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 Domestic
use
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. Europe’s
water
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 usage is almost the same as North
America
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Overall
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,
from
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of
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 the 6 areas, 4 of the area’s
water
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 usage is only based on Agricultural
use
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. Unlike the 4 areas, the
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regions
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regions'
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 usage of
water
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 is balanced in each aspect.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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