The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

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diagram illustrates the steps of producing

sugar

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from

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cane

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, presented in seven steps.

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, the process of making

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is divided

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two stages. The first is growing

sugar

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cane

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and the latter is manufacturing. All of those stages pass through seven steps,

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with cultivating

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cane

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and

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with drying and cooling

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. In detail, the initial process is planting the

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cane

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and

keep

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them

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growing for 12-18 months.

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, the

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cane

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are

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ready to be harvested either by farmers or machines.

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, in the second stage, after being harvested, the

further

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step is to load them in the truck and crush them into pieces to form juice by using a crushing machine. The juice that has been produced

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to be purified in a filter so that it will transform into clear water. After that, fire the purified juice in an evaporator to form syrup.

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Subsequently

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the next step is

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separating

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crystals from syrup in a centrifuge. Eventually,

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is formed after drying and cooling the crystals.