The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar chart presents the
overall
proportion of films released and ticket sales in a nation, between 1996 and 2006.
Overall
, there was an increase in the rate of movies released for a decade,
while
film stub rates have small growth in most genres. In 1996, drama films were the highest far compared to the others for the debut number, which is 35%,
while
romance film was the smallest which is about 7%.
Moreover
, for the proportion of the sold theatre passed, comedy movies were the highest which is exactly 20%,
while
fantasy movies were the least popular. It was lower than 5%.
Finally
, in 2006, drama films were still the highest in the number of
cinemas
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launches, followed by comedy and fantasy,
while
romance remained the same as in the past decade.
Furthermore
, the highest sales rate in movie categories remained the same as in the past, which is comedy,
while
romance
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the lowest.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
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