The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The given bar charts
illustrates
the activities of graduate and postgraduate Change the verb form
illustrate
students
at the end
of their studies in the United Kingdom in 2008. Overall
, UK postgraduate students
devoted the highest proportion of their activities to further
study, while
postgraduate students
who undertook voluntary work
had the lowest proportion.
According to
the first chart, approximately 3000 graduate students
pursued further
education, compared to 3500 engaged in voluntary work
. Additionally
, the numbers of people who were unemployed and those working part-time were very similar in numbers, with the former at 16235 and the latter at 17735.
The second chart shows that the population of postgraduate pupils engaging in further
study topped the list (about 3000), followed by part-time work
slightly above 2500. Moreover
, while
345 postgraduate students
did voluntary work
, 1625 of them were unemployed.Submitted by hongminh317 on
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