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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last times you complained •explain what you want the manager to do.

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Dear sir, My name is Harjeet and I usually visit near sports
center
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 because I am a sports lover. I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction about the changing rooms in the sports club.
Also
, I already noted
this
 problem to the team leader but he did not do anything about it. To start with the problem that humankind has been facing for two months.
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task achievement
Complete the letter by clearly describing the issue, detailing previous complaints, and stating a clear request to the manager.
coherence cohesion
Use a polite and appropriate opening and closing salutation to make your letter seem more professional.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea or part of the overall message for better organization and clarity.
task achievement
Started to address the task by mentioning a problem with the changing rooms.
coherence cohesion
Attempt to explain the situation and involve previous actions taken.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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