a friend of your is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. he has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. In this letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. - decribe some possible disadvantages . - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

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Dear friend, I’m writing

this

letter to you in order to provide

with

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some advice which I learnt

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apply

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from my experience in

campaign

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the campaign

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since I heard from my

brother in law

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that you are planning to go

this

summer to

campaign

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the campaign

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. First of all, I am sure that will

be enjoying

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such

a new experience and you

will not never forget

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will never forget

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it, since you will be switching off from your daily routine life and

move

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to the self-independent

life style

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lifestyle

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starting,

besides

that , you cannot imagine how your

felling

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feeling

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will be when you

breath

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breathe

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a fresh air or drink a pure or wake up early morning on

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spectacular natural scenery.

On the other hand

, you should not forget to take with you some essential items like insecticide, wet wipes,

GPS

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device,

torch

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, and

last

but the least a portable toilet. The only disadvantage which should considered is that you may

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expose

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more risk if you

didn’t

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take care

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yourself. Unfortunately,

due to

my previous commitment with my

family

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family,

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I will not be able to join with

wonderful

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a wonderful

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experience and I wish you all the best and to return home safely. Truly yours,

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Task Achievement

Ensure your ideas are fully expanded to clearly communicate your advice and reasoning. Some points could be elaborated on for greater clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use paragraphs to segregate different points for clearer structure. Each paragraph should express a clear, single idea.

Language Usage

Be attentive to small grammar and spelling errors as they can slightly distract from the message.

Format

You've captured the essential components of a good letter, including a greeting, body, and closing.

Content

Your enthusiasm and personal insights make your advice feel genuine and thoughtful.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

199 words

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