a friend of your is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. he has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. In this letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. - decribe some possible disadvantages . - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

Dear friend, I’m writing
this
letter to you in order to provide
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some advice which I learnt
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from my experience in
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since I heard from my
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that you are planning to go
this
summer to
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. First of all, I am sure that will
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such
a new experience and you
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it, since you will be switching off from your daily routine life and
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to the self-independent
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starting,
besides
that , you cannot imagine how your
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will be when you
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a fresh air or drink a pure or wake up early morning on
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spectacular natural scenery.
On the other hand
, you should not forget to take with you some essential items like insecticide, wet wipes,
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device,
torch
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, and
last
but the least a portable toilet. The only disadvantage which should considered is that you may
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expose
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to
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more risk if you
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take care
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yourself. Unfortunately,
due to
my previous commitment with my
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I will not be able to join with
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experience and I wish you all the best and to return home safely. Truly yours,
Submitted by maowda1982 on

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Task Achievement
Ensure your ideas are fully expanded to clearly communicate your advice and reasoning. Some points could be elaborated on for greater clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs to segregate different points for clearer structure. Each paragraph should express a clear, single idea.
Language Usage
Be attentive to small grammar and spelling errors as they can slightly distract from the message.
Format
You've captured the essential components of a good letter, including a greeting, body, and closing.
Content
Your enthusiasm and personal insights make your advice feel genuine and thoughtful.

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