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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given map illustrates the improvements in the rural area of Ryemouth in
last
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the last
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 30 years from 1995 until
present
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the present
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 day.
Overall
, major
development
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developments
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 in the town are as follows: farmland and the forest area
has
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 been replaced by
golf
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the golf
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 course and tennis court. In the southern end of the
area
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area,
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 fishing port has been removed.
However
, not many changes have been made to the housing section, and the café situated in
southeast
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the southeast
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 corner. In the southwest corner of the village, shops have been replaced by restaurants and apartments have replaced fish
market
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markets
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.
In addition
 to that, new houses have been added on each side of the road and two new houses have been developed adjacent to the enclosed community of houses.
However
, not many changes have been made to the housing section, and the café situated in
southeast
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the southeast
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 corner.
Also
, a car
par
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park
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 has been introduced next to the hotel,
while
hotel
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the hotel
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 remains unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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