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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.

the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.
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The figures illustrate a comparison between now and the future of a modernized part of Norbiton town.
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, it can be seen that
this
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area
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 is planned to develop into a residential place where factories will be replaced by houses. First of all, expanding the main roads is one of the significant future plans in
this
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area
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. The
square
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 in the middle of the town will be expanded to the north with a housing
area
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 to its west and crossed from the river to the farmland where it will be faced with another housing part.
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, the west side of
this
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square
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 will be constructed
as well as
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 building a small
square
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 in the south of industrial areas. Second of all, more people will settle here to live and the main factories which were located across the east side of the main
square
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 will be a residential
area
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, with a school
at the end
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 of the east road and a playground on the west.
Furthermore
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, there are more facilities,
for example
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, the medical
center
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centre
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 and the shops, in the south of the main
square
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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