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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given map illustrates three possible
area
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areas
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 for a new shop in the town called Pellington. In general, the convenience store will be built in three spots, which are
spot
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spots
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 A, B, and C. Each of the
location
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locations
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 has some distinct characteristics.
Firstly
, if the developer of the shop wants to build it in a strategic area,
then
 A is a better option than the others because it is located in
residential
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a residential
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 area where people are possibly attracted to come.
Besides
, there is
park
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a park
the park
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 next to the location that might be crowded
in
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at
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 the weekend. The second location is B, which position is the countryside.
In
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On
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contrary
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,
this
 spot is less accessible because it will be much harder to see a passer-by. The next pick is
also
 located in the countryside but the population
in
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there is still dense,
also
 it is not too far from the airport and the railway.
Overall
, choosing spot A is more profitable for the owner.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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