The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
The line graph shows information about the number of
visitors
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who came to the UK in terms of purposes, namely holiday, business and visiting friends and relatives over
20-year
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a 20-year
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period between 1989 and 2009
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, all categories experienced different trends during these years. The figures
of
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for
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business and holiday grew with some fluctuations, and the rate of visits to close people increased gradually In 1989, the value of holidays was just over 6.5
million
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after it experienced a steady increase to 9.5 much
visitors
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in 1999, and it decreased slightly to 7.5 bank in 2004.
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, there was a gradual increase to 9
million
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visitors
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in the year 2009. Business travel was at 5.5
million
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at the beginning, after it decreased slowly to 4
million
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in 1990, and it increased rapidly to 7
million
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in 1999
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. Next
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next,
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there was declining decline in 2004 , after that it rose to 8
million
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visitors
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. Visits to friends or relatives
also
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grew, from under 3
million
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in 1989 to around 6
million
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in 2005, but
then
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fell slightly to about 5.5
million
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in 2009

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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