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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
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The line graph highlights data on the
number
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 of foreign guests that came to the UK for various purposes from 1989 to 2009.
Overall
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, the table shows different trends over a period.
While
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 the
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 of
visitors
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 for holiday purposes had the highest index, two other factors in terms of business and visiting friends and relatives experienced a slight decrease with fluctuations over the period. More than 6
million
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people
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 flew to the UK to spend their holidays in 1989.
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 there was gradual growth to 8
million
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 in 1994. Afterwards, the figure reached a peak of almost 10
million
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visitors
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 in 1998. Meanwhile, the
number
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 declined sharply to 7
million
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people
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 in 2004. By 2004, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 for holiday purposes was 9
million
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. Regarding the
visitors
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 with business interests, the starting point of the index was 5.5
million
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people
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.
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 the figure showed a gradual reduction to 4
million
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people
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 in 1994. There was significant growth at 8
million
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people
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 during ten-year periods from 1994 to 2004.
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,
at the end
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 of the period, it had decreased to 7
million
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 by 2009. In terms of
visitors
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 coming to friends and relatives, the figure was nearly 4
million
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people
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 in 1989, and
then
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 the index registered gradual growth from 5
million
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 to 7
million
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 between 1994 and 2004, respectively. Afterwards, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 went down to 6
million
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people
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 in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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