The bar chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
The bar chart compares the amount of
time
that parents spent supporting their kids with four tasks in Australia in 2013.
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Overall
, Linking Words
while
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children
spent most of Use synonyms
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time
learning to dress and doing home tasks with their Correct pronoun usage
their time
mothers
, the amount of Use synonyms
time
spent preparing for bed and playing games was the major Use synonyms
time
of both parents.
Regarding dressing, Use synonyms
children
learned to dress 75% of the Use synonyms
time
from their Use synonyms
mothers
, spent 2% of that Use synonyms
time
with their Use synonyms
fathers
and spent 23% of that Use synonyms
time
with both of them. Use synonyms
Likewise
, Linking Words
mothers
assisted Use synonyms
doing
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in doing
homeworks
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homework
to
their kids half of Change preposition
for
their
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the
time
, almost 40% of that Use synonyms
time
they spent together and in 10% of cases Use synonyms
fathers
helped.
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On the other hand
, parents spent 69% of Linking Words
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time
Correct pronoun usage
their time
for
playing games Change preposition
apply
together with
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children
, 25% of that Use synonyms
time
with only Use synonyms
mothers
and the Use synonyms
last
6% with Linking Words
fathers
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the Linking Words
children
learnt Use synonyms
preparing
their bed 43% of Change the verb form
to prepare
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time
from Add an article
the time
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mothers
, 6% of Correct pronoun usage
their mothers
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time
from Add an article
the time
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fathers
and the Correct pronoun usage
their fathers
last
51% of Linking Words
that
Correct determiner usage
the
time
Use synonyms
they
spent together.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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