The bar chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
The bar chart compares the amount of
time
that parents spent supporting their kids with four tasks in Australia in 2013.
Overall
, while
children
spent most of time
learning to dress and doing home tasks with their Correct pronoun usage
their time
mothers
, the amount of time
spent preparing for bed and playing games was the major time
of both parents.
Regarding dressing, children
learned to dress 75% of the time
from their mothers
, spent 2% of that time
with their fathers
and spent 23% of that time
with both of them. Likewise
, mothers
assisted doing
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in doing
homeworks
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homework
to
their kids half of Change preposition
for
their
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the
time
, almost 40% of that time
they spent together and in 10% of cases fathers
helped.
On the other hand
, parents spent 69% of time
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their time
for
playing games Change preposition
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together with
children
, 25% of that time
with only mothers
and the last
6% with fathers
. Moreover
, the children
learnt preparing
their bed 43% of Change the verb form
to prepare
time
from Add an article
the time
mothers
, 6% of Correct pronoun usage
their mothers
time
from Add an article
the time
fathers
and the Correct pronoun usage
their fathers
last
51% of that
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the
time
they
spent together.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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