The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates data about 10 countries with the utmost number of citizens both in 2019 and 2100
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, in the first year mentioned, the countries which
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crowded most
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China, followed by India and the United States
subsequently
,
however
, the experts indicate that there will be a substitution of some states.
Firstly
, when it comes to 2019, it is undeniable that China was the country with the highest number of populations about 1.4
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people,
India
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was the second at
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1.3
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. Surprisingly, despite being the biggest one, only 146
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Russians existed at the time.
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, Mexico was the tenth around 129
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folks.
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, most academics reckon that India will become the most crowded realm with 1.5
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people
while
only 941
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crowds will live in China,
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that year, Congo, Ethiopia and Tanzania will be on the list
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of Russia, Bangladesh and Mexico.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age distribution
  • urbanization
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • healthcare accessibility
  • literacy rate
  • educational attainment
  • demographic trends
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic factors
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