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The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows how five companies, labelled A to
E
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, spend their money on different things like machinery, building, staff training, and
research
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.
Overall
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, each
company
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 spends differently, with some investing more in certain areas than others.
For example
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,
company
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 B puts a lot into staff training,
while
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company
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 D spends the least on
research
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. Companies C, D, and
E
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 all spend about the same on building projects. Looking closer,
company
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 B spends the most on staff training, over 1.8
billion
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,
while
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company
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 D spends the least on
research
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, exactly 0.6
billion
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. Companies C, D, and
E
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 spend around the same amount on building projects, roughly [insert figure]. When it comes to machinery,
company
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 A spends the most, nearly 1.3
billion
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, and
company
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E
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 invests the most in
research
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, about 1.6
billion
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.
Company
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E
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 spends the least
overall
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, staying below 1
billion
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 across all categories.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words e, research, company, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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