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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or The Antarctic. What areNowd disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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recent times , travel began more common in
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deferent
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country
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 so people
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 see something new but some individuals
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 in
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 the visitor have
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 impact is an expensive trip,
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 the
sahara
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 trip will cost a lot to see it because will need cars,
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,and
also
 food so there are several families will not have the ability to visiting places like
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 like the
antarctic
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for instance
 make the travel
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there hard and not all the minors can go there ,
additionally
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need
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several
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 that make its more bad .
to sum up
, the place that the person visiting
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 most important is to be happy there and relax most places like
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the sahara
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sahara
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 desert
that
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need the person more active
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all
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time
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