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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the driving test
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rates
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 in an Asian country between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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women
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 have the highest percentage of
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rates
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 than
men
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throughtout
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throughout
 all the years. A gradual increase in the
pass
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 rate
were
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was
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 seen from 1990 for both
men
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 and
women
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.
Women
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 performed the best in the
year
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 2000 with
aorund
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around
 70%
pass
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rates
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, making it the highest
pass
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 rate in both categories over the years. The
pass
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rates
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 in
men
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 in 2000 and 2010 remained stable. The
pass
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rates
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 for
women
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 in 1980 and 1990 hovered
aorund
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around
 50%, which was comparatively lower as compared to
men
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 who only had
pass
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rates
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 in the range of 25%-35%. Even though
women
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 performed the best in the
year
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 2000 with the highest
pass
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rates
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, a decrease, though not significantly was seen in the
year
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 2010 with just above 60%. The
pass
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rates
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 of
men
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 experienced a gradual increase in 1980
and1990
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and 1990
 with about 28% and 38% respectively.
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Furthermore
 the
rates
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 rose to around 50% in 2000, which
then
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reamined
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remained
 stable in the
year
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 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, women, men, pass, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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