the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
The chart compares how many people visited the UK for dissimilar reasons in the time period from 1989 to 2009.
As an
overall
trend, while
the number of visitors for business decreased quickly, the figure of visitors who were friends and relatives and holiday visitors rose gradually.
There were about 7 million
people who went to see the UK in 1989 for a holiday and this
level grew up sharply to 9 million
in 1999. After that, it dropped again to 6 million
in 2004. And finally
, this
quantity jumped to 9 million
in 2009. About 4 million
people visited their relatives in 1989. After that, this
level climbed moderately to 7 million
in 2004 and remained constant until 2009. The number of individuals who came to the UK for business were
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was
million
in 1989 and this
quantity plunged quickly to 4 million
in 1994. And then
it jumped rapidly to 7 million
in 2007 and dropped a bit again to 6 million
in 2009.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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