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The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and Sea World from 2001-2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and attactions in Disneyland

The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and Sea World from 2001-2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and attactions in Disneyland
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The graph shows the rides of
Disneyland
 and
Sea world
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SeaWorld
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 from the past few years, the y-axis
depict
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depicts
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 the number of
the
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visitors and the x-axis shows the past few years. By observing
the
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both graphs
i
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 can say that
Disneyland
 is more popular than
Sea world
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SeaWorld
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 because they both start at the same stats and number of
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the visitor
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visitor
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visitors
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 but till 2005
Disneyland
 witnessed an extreme increasing in the number of visitors starting from 2003
unlike
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, unlike
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Sea world
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SeaWorld
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 which rose slightly. In
conclude
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, depending on the graph's stats
i
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 can say that most
of
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people
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the people
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preffer
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prefer
 the rides and
attactions
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attractions
 in
Disneyland
.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words disneyland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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