The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and Sea World from 2001-2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and attactions in Disneyland

The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and Sea World from 2001-2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and attactions in Disneyland
The graph shows the rides of
Disneyland
and
Sea world
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from the past few years, the y-axis
depict
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the number of
the
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visitors and the x-axis shows the past few years. By observing
the
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both graphs
i
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can say that
Disneyland
is more popular than
Sea world
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because they both start at the same stats and number of
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the visitor
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visitor
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but till 2005
Disneyland
witnessed an extreme increasing in the number of visitors starting from 2003
unlike
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Sea world
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SeaWorld
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which rose slightly. In
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, depending on the graph's stats
i
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can say that most
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people
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the people
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preffer
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prefer
the rides and
attactions
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attractions
in
Disneyland
.
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