The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and Sea World from 2001-2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and attactions in Disneyland

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The graph shows the rides of

Disneyland

and

Sea world

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SeaWorld

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from the past few years, the y-axis

depict

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depicts

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the number of

the

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apply

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visitors and the x-axis shows the past few years. By observing

the

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both graphs

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can say that

Disneyland

is more popular than

Sea world

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SeaWorld

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because they both start at the same stats and number of

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the visitor

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visitor

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visitors

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but till 2005

Disneyland

witnessed an extreme increasing in the number of visitors starting from 2003

unlike

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Sea world

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SeaWorld

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which rose slightly. In

conclude

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, depending on the graph's stats

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can say that most

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people

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the people

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preffer

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prefer

the rides and

attactions

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attractions

Disneyland

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