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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given line chart represents information about
millions
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 of people visiting
to
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and from the
UK
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 between 1979 to 1999,
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 the bar chart demonstrates
millions
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 of
UK
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 visitors visiting
the
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well-known nations in 1999.
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, the number of
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UK
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 residents visiting abroad is much higher compared to visa-versa and the topmost visited region by
UK
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 people was France.
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, it is clearly seen from the live graph that
less
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 individuals had visited the
UK
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 compared to
UK
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 folks relocating to foreign countries.
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, in 1979, there were more than 10
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millions
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million
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UK
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 residents who visited abroad and
this
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 kept swelling significantly and attained its peak in 1999 as more than 5 million individuals.
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, numerous
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overseas
oversees
 residents visited the
Uk
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 started
as
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 approximately 10 million .
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this
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, the number kept rising constantly and in 1999, it reached
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less than 30
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millions
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million
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. Apart from these, the most renowned country visited by the folks residing in the
UK
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 is France with
much
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more than 10
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millions
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million
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of
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Uk
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 visitors
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,
spain
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Spain
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 had less than 10
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millions
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million
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of
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tourist
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tourists
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 from the
UK
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.
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, fewer than 5 million
of
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visitors visited Turkey, Greece and the USA during 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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