The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.

The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.
The line graph provides the audience's radio and
television
during the day and night in October to December
among
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1992 for individuals over 4 years.
Overall
, it can be easily noticed that the figure
of
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the numbers
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number
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of
television
audiences was fluctuating.
In
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the other hand , It is the peak of
this
graph
as well as
in
television
audiences , just under 50 per cent.
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, at midnight both
of
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audiences
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the audiences
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didn't use radio and
television
,
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the figure
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had
viwed
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viewed
vowed
that a significant decrease from over 40% with
television
and about 15% with radio to reach just above 0%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words television with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • audience sizes
  • peak times
  • commuting
  • trends
  • prime time
  • fluctuating
  • lifestyle
  • technological advancements
  • engaging content
  • work schedules
  • gradual decline
  • habits
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