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The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.

The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.
#line #radio #television #audience
The line graph provides the audience's radio and
television
 during the day and night in October to December
among
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 1992 for individuals over 4 years.
Overall
, it can be easily noticed that the figure
of
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the numbers
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 of
television
 audiences was fluctuating.
In
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 the other hand , It is the peak of
this
 graph
as well as
 in
television
 audiences , just under 50 per cent.
Additionally
, at midnight both
of
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audiences
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the audiences
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 didn't use radio and
television
,
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 had
viwed
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viewed
vowed
 that a significant decrease from over 40% with
television
 and about 15% with radio to reach just above 0%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words television with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • audience sizes
  • peak times
  • commuting
  • trends
  • prime time
  • fluctuating
  • lifestyle
  • technological advancements
  • engaging content
  • work schedules
  • gradual decline
  • habits
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