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Topic: The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of this site.

Topic: The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of this site.
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The supplied maps illustrate the plan
of
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for
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 one industrial area in a city which is called Norbition, and how it will
be
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apply
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look in future.
Overall
; some sections will be established
however
; the others will be destroyed.
In addition
;
number
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a number
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 of some parts will not be changed at all.
It is clear that
;
structure
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the structure
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 of
this
 area is approximately going to be developed.
According to
 the maps; a small
square
 will be made behind the main
square
 in
central
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the central
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of
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apply
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area.
Furthermore
; if you decide to pass the river, it will be possible for you in future, because a bridge is going to be
instructed
Verb problem
installed
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 near the farmland.
Moreover
; the medical
center
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centre
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 and shops will be made respectively at
right
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the right
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 and left of
new
Add an article
the new
a new
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 small
square
.
Additionally
; the main
square
 and road which is near the right of it are surrounded by factories but in future houses will be established
instead
 of them. There is one plan to build
School
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a School
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 and playground
at the end
 of
main
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the main
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 road, too.
one
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One
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 extra road and some houses will be built respectively next to the main
square
 and
new
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the new
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 bridge.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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