In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, there has been
a
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competition between industries to make the most innovative and distinct
advertisement
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, claiming their products are
the best
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than others, which is caused by market demand and financial purposes. It appears that
this
trend is sociologically and environmentally harmful. The phenomenon of businesses competing to make unique marketing is caused by multiple reasons.
Firstly
, if one company uses an eye-catching banner
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instance, they will attract more
people
to window-shopping their goods and consider purchasing afterwards. Another example, studies have shown that in an industry with fine
advertising
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management will sustain for 20 to 30 years more than their competitors.
This
way, producers will gain a high margin
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their financial report continuously, benefiting themselves.
Secondly
, the current technological change leads
people
to analyze their products' preferences. One example, studies
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shown that advertisements with artificial intelligence usage bring 75% more satisfaction to customers on making payment
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a product. Regarding these causes, there are several drawbacks that the companies
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not been aware of. First of all, the waste
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clothes or food consumption,
for instance
, can contribute to a bad water cycle, causing a dreadful disease for animals worldwide. Admittedly,
this
is an environmental problem that takes a long time to cure.
In addition
, if
people
have the minimal ability to control their desire
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, there will be consumerism in the community. Eventually,
people
will be unaware of their economic consequences.
To conclude
, it seems that budgetary goals and
people
’s requests are the main causes of the ongoing issue of industries stating their products are new.
This
situation will bring negative effects on the environment and society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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