some people think that the olympic games are exciting events that bring other nations together. others say the olympics is a waste of money and the money could be better spent on other things. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In today modern’s age, the Olympic

games

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can be understood as an entertaining form in order to bridge the gap between different

nations

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.

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, there are others who hold the opposite that the investment is too

wasting

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to spend on the

Olympics

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and

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people

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that people

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should consider using

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money

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the money

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for worthy purposes. From my perspective, I believe that it is useless to hold the

Olympics

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and the

money

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should be invested in better things which are beneficial.

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, the reason why

people

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think the

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should

be hold

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due

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to the effectiveness in terms of

the

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apply

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international diplomacy.

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,

this

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game is organized

for enhancing

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the relationship between

nations

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and thereby boost economic efficiency through tourism or supporting each other in terms of education,

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and military

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.

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,

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show brings peace to

among

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nations

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all over the world and

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people

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from other

countries

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have

a

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opportunity to communicate and exchange their

point

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points

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of view with others

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comprehending

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about traditions and cultures of other

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. To exemplify, a survey found that most

nations

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take

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part in the Olympic

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as a global event have a better relationship than

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which do not. Another point worth considering is the argument of spending

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on holding the Olympic

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because they believe it is wasting that the

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is hold

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as the investment could be used for primary demands. It is true that the

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do not bring

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clear benefits to

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other than increasing the better relationship, but it is only the entertaining events or to be blunt, it is useless for human life.

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, the

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spending

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on

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this

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events could be spent on several issues

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as education, medical research, food or accommodation problems because it

show

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practical effectiveness, especially

poor

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in poor

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countries

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and developing

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, holding

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game may be a burden for them

due to

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the huge expenditure.

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, the

money

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should be considered before being invested in

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game and it is worth being

use

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for better purposes so as to bring

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benefits to each country. In conclusion, despite the advantageous element of holding the

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give

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to the closeness of international relations, I strongly believe that the

money

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is wasting and the

fund

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funds

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investing

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in

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this

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games

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should be used for essential problems

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as health or education rather than wasting them in useless events as the

Olympics

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.