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Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification.

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 of
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providied
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provided
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 may have advantages, others argue that it
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in studying the main majors.
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 l will draw my own opinion. On the one hand, focusing
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 studying the qualification is
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sgnificant
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significant
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studying other
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so recently
, the major of
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provided
 additional
subjects
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 for their
students
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.whilst these
subjects
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 may have advantages, others argue that it
is
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should give all
interesting
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interest
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 in studying the main majors.
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finally
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 l will draw my own opinion. On the one hand, focusing
in
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most
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sgnificant
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significant
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studying other
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. To clarify more, some
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students
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studying other
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a low JPA in their qualification, in sequences these effects
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negatively
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carrers
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career
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people
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students
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in
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additiona
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additional
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students
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 knowledge about other majors,
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besides
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 help them to improve their skills and personalities. Leadership Management course ,
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universities
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subjects
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' study plans, because help
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 to be
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 in their workplace. For
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, most of the public believes that educational institutions should provide various
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students
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 have to be interested in their qualifications, it
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opposite
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 of studying other beneficial
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. To recommendations, the
universities
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 should encourage their
students
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 to learn other
courses
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, especially those which develop their abilities.

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Structure
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Style
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Introduction
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Conclusion
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Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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