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The charts below provide information about the websites where consumers from Australia and New Zealand bought products in 2012, as well as their reasons for online shopping. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide information about the websites where consumers from Australia and New Zealand bought products in 2012, as well as their reasons for online shopping. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts provide key information about the causes that make people in
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 prefer online shopping, and the
websites
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 where customers can buy products in 2012, with units measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most consumers in
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 preferred to purchase the majority of commodities mainly from both local and international
websites
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 compared to other
websites
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.
In addition
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, lower prices than physical stores
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 the essential reason, which prompted New
Zealand
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 customers for online shopping;
whereas
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 convenience and quality control have a greater effect on Australians .
According to
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 what is shown, both local and international
websites
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 accounted for the highest ratio of online shopping, in
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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, at 72% and 65% respectively;
in contrast
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, international
websites
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 represented the lowest percentage of online sales, at 8% in
Australia
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 and 10% in New
Zealand
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. In terms of reasons, the highest reason for online shopping was lower prices than physical stores in
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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, at 53% and 57% respectively.
Conversely
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, the lowest reason was the same in both countries, at 5%, which was other reasons.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, zealand, websites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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