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Band 4

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to use printed materials such as books and articles to do research than it is to use the Internet. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#materials #books #articles #research #internet #support
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It is argued that
researchers
 should use the traditional
method
 of research i.e.
books
 and articles or they should use the
internet
. In my opinion,
internet
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the internet
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 provides tremendous
benfits
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benefits
 over the traditional
method
 and it
also
 comes with
ecofriendly
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an ecofriendly
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 approach. Investing in computers is one of the best
investment
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investments
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 as you can get
know
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to know
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 about anything just at
click
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the click
a click
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 of a button. Specifically talking about research,
internet
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the internet
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 provides
vast
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a vast
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 variety of resources
such
 as
books
, journals, articles, podcasts and much more.
Researchers
 can approach it at any time, anywhere with a good
internet
 connection. Taking an example from
google
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Google
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, google provides exact and fine knowledge for whatever you search on it.
Internet
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The Internet
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 has proven to create social connections as well and
researchers
 can discuss with their fellow
researchers
over
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their desired topic. On the flip side of the coin, the traditional
method
,
books
 and articles are limited to a specific idea. Sometimes reading a book for a long time creates
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boredom
boredum
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boredom
.
For instance
, it is found in one of
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the studfies
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studfies
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studies
 in England that people read
books
 in order to fall asleep. Undoubtedly, it is hard to go to
library
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the library
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 and
mostly
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most
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 the
books
 are out of
library
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the library
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 so you need to wait to get that specific book. To penetrate, it would not be wrong to say that
internet
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the internet
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 has several benefits over the
tradional
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traditional
method
 of researching if
its
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 is used for a good outcome. If not used as a source of knowledge it can
also
 mislead people.
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Task Achievement
Make sure to present a clear thesis statement early in the essay to outline your stance and main arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
Integrate a wider range of linking words to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Incorporate a more diverse vocabulary to accurately express nuances in your argument.
Task Achievement
Support your arguments with more detailed examples or evidence for a stronger impact on the reader.
Task Achievement
Effectively positioned the argument in favor of the Internet for research purposes.
Coherence & Cohesion
Maintained a structured approach to presenting the argument, with a clear progression of ideas.
Task Achievement
Utilized relevant examples to support the main argument, such as the convenience of Google for research.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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