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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table provides data about
underground
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the underground
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 railway system in six cities (
London
, Paris,
Tokyo
, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles). The table
also
 gives information about the date of establishment, travel channel in Kilometers and
number
 of passengers it
carry
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carries
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 each year (in millions).
Overall
,
London
 was the first city to introduce
underground
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an underground
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 rail channel in 1863
whereas
, Los Angeles was the
last
 one.
Maximum
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A maximum
The maximum
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number
 of passengers carried via underground railways system
were
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was
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 noticed in
Tokyo
.
While
,
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apply
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 Kyoto had the lowest
number
 of people travelling via that medium.
London
 had the largest underground route of 394
kms
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km
 followed by Paris and
Tokyo
, which is,199 and 155
kms
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km
repectively
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respectively
. Even after having the largest channel in
London
, the place was far away from carrying
number
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a number
the number
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 of
passangers
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passengers
 carried by
Tokyo
 each year i.e. 1928 Million. Washinton DC was responsible for carrying 144 million travellers each year via its underground metro
flourised
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flourished
 in 126
Kms
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Km
 of the area.
However
,
Loss
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Los
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 Angeles and Kyoto
intoduced
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introduced
this
 mode of travel quite late
due to
 which it's not very famous in those areas and not
much
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many
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 people travel via that mode.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, tokyo, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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