Some people say that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Until now
As a result
of
there are a great deal of issues ,Life is considerably hazardous for wild Change preposition
apply
animals
and birds
such
as deforestation , shortage of food, or climate change. Decrease
Correct article usage
The decrease
of
undomesticated Change preposition
in
animals
are
posing detrimental consequences for us. Change the verb form
is
According to
stereotype
some of these main methods Fix the agreement mistake
stereotypes
is
a numerous Verb problem
apply
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assistance
asistance
and water and food Correct your spelling
assistance
supply
given to the shielding for untamed Fix the agreement mistake
supplies
animals
and birds
To begins
I Correct subject-verb agreement
begin
am
particularly Unnecessary verb
apply
agrer
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agree
this
opinion . Since wild Change preposition
with this
animals
are useful for environment
. Add an article
the environment
For instance
wolf. They feed died
Replace the word
dead
animals
meats
. By dint of Fix the agreement mistake
meat
this
way, they cleaning environment from illness or dogs are good protector
for your house or children . Fix the agreement mistake
protectors
Birds
are useful for plants and trees such
as woodpecker
. They rescue harmful Fix the agreement mistake
woodpeckers
insect
or Fix the agreement mistake
insects
bug
from trees
In spite of there are many merits . Fix the agreement mistake
bugs
However
there are other Add a comma
However,
opinion
Change the wording
opinions
for
wild Change preposition
about
animals
. Firstly
create
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creates
to
conflict among Change preposition
apply
social
population Correct article usage
the social
such
as financial support . Since not everyone agrees to spend money an
Correct your spelling
on
animals
. Especially it is though for poor countries . In additionally
it is complicated to find Replace the word
addition
provider
for Fix the agreement mistake
providers
animals
. Because they are sometimes aggressive or maybe infected
In conclusion , because of
nature is the main part of our Change preposition
apply
life
,we Fix the agreement mistake
lives
would
protect our Verb problem
should
animals
. The government should be
pay attention and comestible supply given to wild Unnecessary verb
apply
animals
and birds
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