Some people say that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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there are a great deal of issues ,Life is considerably hazardous for wild

animals

and

birds

such

as deforestation , shortage of food, or climate change.

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undomesticated

animals

are

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posing detrimental consequences for us.

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stereotype

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some of these main methods

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a numerous

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assistance

asistance

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assistance

and water and food

supply

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supplies

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given to the shielding for untamed

animals

and

birds

begins

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particularly

agrer

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agree

this

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opinion . Since wild

animals

are useful for

environment

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the environment

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wolf. They feed

died

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animals

meats

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. By dint of

this

way, they cleaning environment from illness or dogs are good

protector

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for your house or children .

Birds

are useful for plants and trees

such

woodpecker

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woodpeckers

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. They rescue harmful

insect

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insects

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bug

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from trees In spite of there are many merits .

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there are other

opinion

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for

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wild

animals

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conflict among

social

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population

such

as financial support . Since not everyone agrees to spend money

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animals

. Especially it is though for poor countries . In

additionally

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it is complicated to find

provider

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providers

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for

animals

. Because they are sometimes aggressive or maybe infected In conclusion , because

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nature is the main part of our

life

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lives

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,we

would

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protect our

animals

. The government should

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pay attention and comestible supply given to wild

animals

and

birds

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Coherence & Cohesion

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Grammar

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Structure

Make sure your introduction clearly states your viewpoint and that your conclusion summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.

Task Response

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Examples

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

233 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
ecological balance
species extinction
wildlife conservation
sustainable development
ecosystem services
habitat destruction
endangered species
conservation efforts
natural heritage
human encroachment
poaching
genetic diversity
climate change
environmental stewardship
protection measures
wildlife sanctuary
biological significance
conservation biology
environmental advocacy

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Your opinion

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