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Band 3.5

Some people say that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Until now
As a result
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of
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apply
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there are a great deal of issues ,Life is considerably hazardous for wild
animals
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 and
birds
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such
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 as deforestation , shortage of food, or climate change.
Decrease
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The decrease
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of
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in
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 undomesticated
animals
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are
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is
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 posing detrimental consequences for us.
According to
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stereotype
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stereotypes
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 some of these main methods
is
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apply
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a numerous
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assistance
asistance
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assistance
 and water and food
supply
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supplies
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 given to the shielding for untamed
animals
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 and
birds
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 To
begins
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begin
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 I
am
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apply
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particularly
agrer
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agree
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this
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with this
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 opinion . Since wild
animals
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 are useful for
environment
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the environment
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 .
For instance
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 wolf. They feed
died
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dead
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animals
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meats
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meat
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. By dint of
this
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 way, they cleaning environment from illness or dogs are good
protector
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protectors
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 for your house or children .
Birds
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 are useful for plants and trees
such
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 as
woodpecker
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woodpeckers
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. They rescue harmful
insect
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insects
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 or
bug
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bugs
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 from trees In spite of there are many merits .
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However
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However,
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 there are other
opinion
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opinions
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for
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about
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 wild
animals
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 .
Firstly
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create
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creates
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to
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apply
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conflict among
social
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the social
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 population
such
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 as financial support . Since not everyone agrees to spend money
an
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on
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animals
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 . Especially it is though for poor countries . In
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additionally
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addition
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 it is complicated to find
provider
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providers
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 for
animals
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. Because they are sometimes aggressive or maybe infected In conclusion , because
of
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apply
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nature is the main part of our
life
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lives
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,we
would
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should
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 protect our
animals
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 . The government should
be
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apply
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pay attention and comestible supply given to wild
animals
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 and
birds
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Task Achievement
Try to develop your main points more fully with clearer examples and explanations to enhance task achievement.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and topic-specific vocabulary to improve your essay's flow and clarity.
Grammar
Check your essay for grammatical errors and aim to use a variety of sentence structures to enhance the overall quality.
Structure
Make sure your introduction clearly states your viewpoint and that your conclusion summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.
Task Response
You have a clear stance on the topic, which is good for task response.
Examples
You attempted to use examples to support your points, which is a positive aspect for both task achievement and coherence.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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