Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

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animals
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relationship
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. And they always helped each other . Until now there are plenty
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views about keeping among the people.
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of people believe that having a pet benefits them.
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some people
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that it may
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for their
children
. In my
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the pros
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outweigh
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outweigh
the cons of having
pets
It is true that there are many visible harms .
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animals
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hair and fur
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of
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allergic
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. Because
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children
are vulnerable .
This
disease strikes victims swiftly. In
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animals
always like in the
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bosom
of nature .
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in their hair . After
children
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cat or dog. I guess they do not wash their arms and
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something or
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their face or eyes with grubby arms .
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any
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sickness. The solution
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these issues is
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up
pets
every time and teach
children
to always wash their hands If I tell
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view about having a pet . There are a great deal of advantages
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children
ʼs behaviour and
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characteristics
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.
Firstly
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pets
, I think they live
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environment .
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dogs are firmly and strong protection for
children
.
Besides
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pets
are growing up
children
together . Kids make educate friendly and kindly In conclusion in spite of there can
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some
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from
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their
animals
,the merits of
pets
are more impacted . For the reasons
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discussed
, I suggest
pets
in the family . Since there are numerous
advanteges
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advantages
rather than disadvantages for their
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
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