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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
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The chart illustrates the data about users purchasing
on
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various goods in
variety
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 of countries within the period of 2002.
It is clear that
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while
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 the highest number of
people
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 in
Turkey
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 and Ireland
spending
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 their revenue on food products and tobacco, Italians do the same for garments.
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, the lowest number of
people
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 investing
on
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 education and
holiday
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holidays
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 from their annual profit live in Spain. 32, 14% of Turkish
people
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 prefer purchasing
on
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food products and tobacco, Ireland follows
Turkey
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 with 28,9% and Sweden is in the
last
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 place with 15,77% after Italy with 16,36%.
Turkey
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 keeps its peak position in the field of education and pastime with 4,35%, but Italy precedes it for garments with 9% ,
while
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Turkey
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 follows it with 6,63% The fewest number of
people
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 -15, 77% spending money on goods and 5, 40% on garments live in Sweden ,
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 Spain replaces it in the field of education and leisure with the lowest proportion 1, 98% among all countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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