Some people think that parents have the greatest influence on their child’s academic development, while other think that a child’s teacher has more influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Structure
Your essay initiates a good discussion on the influence of parents versus educators on a child's education, touching upon the importance of parental support. To enhance your work, try to structure your essay more clearly with distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should ideally focus on one main idea.
Elaboration
Provide more elaboration on each point with detailed examples or explanations. Expanding on your arguments would help demonstrate a wider understanding of the topic and enrich your essay.
Linking
For coherence and cohesion, work on linking your ideas more smoothly. Use transition words to guide the reader through your arguments and ensure that each paragraph flows logically to the next.
Topic Understanding
You have successfully initiated a debate on a relevant educational topic, showing awareness of different perspectives.
Argumentation
Your argument about the role of parental support in a child's educational journey is a good starting point for discussion. Including personal or hypothetical examples could strengthen this argument further.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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