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The line graph below shows the number of single-family homes constacted in the US by region over the period of six years. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting in the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The line graph below shows the number of single-family homes constacted in the US by region over the period of six years. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting in the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The
number
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 of
single family
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single-family
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homes
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 was decreasing between 2006 and 2012. The highest
number
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 of single-family
homes
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 was in 2006 in all regions. The
lowes
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lowest
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number
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 of single-family
homes
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 was in 2010 in all regions. Most regions had the
number
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 of
homes
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 decreased significantly in 2006 and hit the lowest point in 2010,
then
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 surged slightly of demand constant until 2012.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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