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The graph shows the life expectancy of people living in Asian regions from 1950 and predicts life expectancy until 2300. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the life expectancy of people living in Asian regions from 1950 and predicts life expectancy until 2300. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides
the
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information about the people's expectancy of
life
 in the regions of
asia
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Asia
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 between two time periods (1950-2300).
overall
, Western
Asia
 is drastically increased followed by
china
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China
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 and all the
others
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other
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 regions are likely to be similar with little variations. During the recorded period just over
the
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50
years
 of
life
 expectancy is recorded for western
asia
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Asia
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 and it has
rised suddely
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risen suddenly
 to just under
the
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80 in 2000 and
therefore
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is
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steadily reached
to
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nearly 103
years
 in 2300, china stood
in
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the second highest
life
expetency
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expectancy
at the end
 of the recorded period with approximately 95
years
.
On the other hand
, India,
South eastern
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Asia
, Other
south-centeral
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south-central
asia
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Asia
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 and Other Eastern Asian regions
are having
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almost
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same
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the same
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 level of
life
 expectancy
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the 1950s with around 40
years
 and in 2300 with 90
years
 approximately with some minor differences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words life, asia, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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