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Some people think that university students should specialize in one subject, while others think universities should encourage students to learn a range of subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #universities #range #subjects
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 of people opine that university students should specialize in one subject rather than learning a range of subjects. In my opinion, learning
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 of subjects would definitely give
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 hand to the learners
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 one subject. To start with, studying
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sepcific
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specific
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 will limit the knowledge horizon as
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a student
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student
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students
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 wouldn't get
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 exposure to other subjects which are required for career growth.
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ships
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, human elements and leadership
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courses
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 required to
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acquire leadership and management skills which were beneficial for my career advancement.
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task response
Consider developing your essay further by thoroughly discussing both views presented in the prompt and providing a clear, strong conclusion that summarizes your opinion and the rationale behind it.
coherence cohesion
For higher coherence, ensure that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next, enhancing the flow of your argument.
task achievement
Although the essay contains supported arguments, try to provide equal coverage and development for opposing viewpoints to strengthen your task achievement score.
task achievement
You've provided a relevant personal example to support your viewpoint, which adds credibility to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction effectively introduces the topic and your opinion, setting a clear direction for the essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expertise
  • Depth
  • Specialized career paths
  • Experts
  • Narrow perspectives
  • Adaptability
  • Well-rounded education
  • Critical thinking
  • Creativity
  • Flexible skills
  • Overwhelming
  • Jack of all trades, master of none
  • Elective options
  • Lifelong learning
  • Evolving job market
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