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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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bar chart illustrates how many people lived in the city on various continents of the world in 1950 and 2007 and there is a prediction for 2050.
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, the lowest percentage of the
population
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 was in Africa throughout all periods,
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 the highest was in North
America
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. There is a forecast for an increasing
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population
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 in all parts of the world.
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 the graph, there was a sharp growth in the percentage of the
population
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 in Latin
America
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 from 1950 to 2007 by 34%.
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 in Africa, Asia, and Europe, the figures for people rose considerably by 22, 24, and 21% respectively at the same time period. North
America
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 and Oceania provided a not significant increase and the percentage reached 79% and 71% in 2007, respectively.
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, there is a prediction for 2050 that the number of people will experience the highest growth from 37 to 62% in Africa and from 41 to 66% in Asia.
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, in Latin
America
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 and
Europe
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Europe,
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 the
population
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 will reach 89% and 84%.
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, North
America
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 and Oceania will follow the same pattern and will account for 90% and 76%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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