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The graph below gives information about computer possession by household in one European country between 1997 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about computer possession by household in one European country between 1997 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how many
computers
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 every person has in the Europe continent in a
period
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 from 1997 to 2011.
Overall
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, there was a decrease in the number of people who did not have
computers
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 throughout the
period
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,
while
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 those who had one computer or three, or more experienced continued growth, and those who had two
computers
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 increased considerably.
According to
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 the chart, the figures for people with one computer only remained the same from 1997 to 1999 approximately 1%.
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 the percentage of households gradually increased over time from 1999 and reached around 7,5% in 2011. The number of people who had two
computers
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 started from approximately 5% in 1997 and rose significantly to 29% in 2011.
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, those who owned three or more
computers
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 accounted for around 44% in 1997 and fluctuated during the time
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, and numbers increased by only 2% to 2011.
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, the figures for households who did not have
computers
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 witnessed a downward trend from 1997 to 2006 from 48% to 31%.
However
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, there was a small growth
by
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of
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 around 4% in 2006,
then
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 the percentage continued to decline
until
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to
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 18% by the end of the time
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words computers, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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