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Some people say that it is individual responsibility to protect the environment while others say it is the government's primary role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Environmental
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The environmental
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 imbalance has become a universal issue nowadays. Critiques believe that protecting the environment is
public
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 duty
whereas
 others say that it is
government's
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the government's
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 role to save
environment
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the environment
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. Being a human,
i
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I
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 would like to say that everyone needs to come together to work against
the
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apply
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global warming and other environmental issues. To commence with, an individual has to do his/her part individually by not collaborating towards global warming. People should implement
such
 standards in their
life
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lives
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such
 as using public transport
instead
 of their personal vehicles
becuase
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because
 motors emit carbon dioxide which is hazardous for every living being.
Public
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The public
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 should opt
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for recycling
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recycling
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, in
this
 way, they can reduce the production of plastic. The
governement
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government
 is on the same side as well. The higher authorities should implement strict rules against those who contribute towards any kind of pollution. They
shoulds
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also
 encourage factories to move to
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 as poisonous fumes are discharged from these firms. Another prominent rule
ruling
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the ruling
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 party can keep in
account
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the account
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 is to create awareness
by
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through
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 TV programs. Public by being aware of the consequences of their activities, people may alter their
way
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ways
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, to avoid harming the environment. To penetrate, it takes lots of
efforts
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 because mobilising people's standard of living is not a
one day
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 game. But
continous
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continuous
 collaboration
of
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public
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the public
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 and the government can lead towards
sensible
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the sensible
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 approach
of
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 preserving nature.
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