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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table outlines the data
of
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 the
population
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 density of three major countries (India,
China
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 and the
USA
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).
Overall
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,
China
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 and
USA
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 have similar land
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area
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 but the difference in their
population
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 is quite wide. Out of all the three countries,
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USA
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the USA
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 has the highest number of people living in urban areas
whereas
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, India has its majority
population
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 staying in rural areas. India has the maximum number of people staying in one square kilometre i.e. 455.
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 has
lowest
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population
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 with only 36 people staying in one square Km. In terms
od
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of
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 the
population
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 increase of each nation’s
population
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 since 2017, India’s
population
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 had a positive increase of 1.11% followed by the
USA
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 and
China
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, +0.71% and +0.39% respectively.
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 to that, it is observable
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China
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that China
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 and the
USA
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 have almost
same
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the same
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area
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 of land in square Kilometres 9 Million sq Kms approx., with varied distribution of
population
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 in urban and rural
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area
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areas
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, the
USA
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 have 83% of
it’s
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population
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 residing in urban
area
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 where only 58% of chines
population
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 stays in urban
area
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, usa, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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