The graph shows the life expectancy of people living in Asian regions from 1950 and predicts life expectancy until 2300. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the life expectancy of people living in Asian regions from 1950 and predicts life expectancy until 2300.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph indicates statistically how long people in Asian countries live from 1950 to the present and predicts
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2300. It
it
Correct your spelling
is
show examples
clear that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
life expectancy is expanded in
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
all regions, and the shapes of the line graphs are quite resemble. First of all, Other Eastern
Asia
is always at the top
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
the graph during the years, which started at 51 in 1950 and
predicts
Wrong verb form
is predicted
show examples
to be over 100 in 2300. In most of the periods, the second place was China accounting for 45 years old in 1950 and the figure will increase to 98
until
Change preposition
by
show examples
2300, but Western
Asia
took and would remain the second
while
Change preposition
in
show examples
2010 and 2100
according to
the prediction. It is hard to see the significant difference among other regions which are India, South-eastern
Asia
and Other South-central
Asia
, and the numbers of these were less
then
Replace the word
than
show examples
40 years old in 1950,
however
, it is predicted to become around 90 in 2300.
Overall
, all of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
life expectancy
predicts
Wrong verb form
is predicted
show examples
significantlly
Correct your spelling
significantly
higher in 2300 than in 1950, and that of Western
Asia
is the longest among the areas.
Submitted by ryoga17.0325 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!