Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?
Despite being generally illegal, punishing physical still
exist
in some countries of the world. Correct subject-verb agreement
exists
Due to
the
fact, some people argue that physical Correct determiner usage
this
punishment
is one of thier
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their
the
way
to guide Change to a plural noun
ways
children
to the right way
. From my point of view, I totally disagree with this
statement and this
essay will provide the reasons for this
opinion.
There can be fund
myriad of reasons why I do not agree with Correct your spelling
a
this
view about physical punishment
. Firstly
, i
can say that it is not just physical Change the capitalization
I
punishment
, because it can impact effect for both mental health too. Although
it seems like a physical punishment
way
to bring up children
, it would be reason
to Add an article
a reason
the reason
loose
reason to live. Physical Replace the word
lose
punishment
can not improve quality
of school studying, Correct article usage
the quality
while
it is affecting for child's mental health. Additionally
, parents have a huge role in Correct article usage
a child's
child's
life. Correct article usage
a child's
For
example
most Add a comma
example,
of
parents perform as Change preposition
apply
the
role Correct article usage
apply
model
for their kids. If Fix the agreement mistake
models
children
are punished physically regularly, it would
not be better for Wrong verb form
will
next
generation. Correct article usage
the next
Children
may think that it is okay to punish physically. As a result
, next
generation may suffer from Correct article usage
the next
this
way
of bringing up.
During the period of research which was for it is efficient that bringing up like this
, it became clear that it is not good
Correct article usage
a good
way
approach to correct children
's behavior
. When Change the spelling
behaviour
teenager
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teenagers
do
not know why they are punished or what should they correct, Change the verb form
does
it
is no correction, Correct pronoun usage
there
children
still fo the same behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
Instead
of this
, parent
should teach Fix the agreement mistake
parents
how
to correct the mistake which was Correct pronoun usage
them how
done
by them by heart. Verb problem
made
For
example
Add a comma
example,
i
am always Change the capitalization
I
explained
by Verb problem
told
parents
how to do something correctly whenever Correct pronoun usage
my parents
i
Change the capitalization
I
did
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make
mistake
. Correct article usage
a mistake
Thus
, i
can fully understand my mistake and try to not do it again.
Change the capitalization
I
To conclude
, because of the reasons mentioned above, i
totally disagree with Change the capitalization
I
this
kind of way
to bring up. Due to
Change preposition
In
the
fact, it Correct article usage
apply
impact enormously
Verb problem
affects
teenager's
mental health and Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers'
that is
why it abandoned
.Add a missing verb
is abandoned
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