The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The given pie charts display the electricity generation from different fuel sources in separate years, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, in
the
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both countries, total production increased significantly.
Moreover
, in Australia, coal had the highest portion among other fuel sources in both years,
while
in
the
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France the main source of electricity was allocated to natural
power
in 2000.
According to
the first chart, half of the total generation consisted of coal, and
this
amount went up dramatically to 130
units
in the end. Despite the fact that
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power
saw a rising trend
by
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16 from 36 to 20
units
, natural gas and oil declined, to 2
unite
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each.
In the
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second graph shows, in 1980, coal and natural
power
shared a similar proportion together
totaling
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50
units
, and the former remained stable and the latter decreased substantially (2
units
)
at the end
of the period.
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Additionally
Additionslly
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Additionally
, in the beginning, the share of oil, nuclear
power
and
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power
were
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20, 15 and 5
units
, respectively. production from
hyro
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hydro
power
dropped merely 2
units
,
although
the electricity generation from nuclear
power
and oil, with a dramatic increase to 126 and 25
units
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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