You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: •introduce yourself, •say why you are interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

Dear Sir/Madam I
write
Wrong verb form
am writing
show examples
this
letter as I saw your announcement in
local
Add an article
the local
a local
show examples
newspaper that you are looking
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
to
hiring
Wrong verb form
hire
show examples
new
Correct article usage
a new
show examples
member
Fix the agreement mistake
members
show examples
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
show examples
for
goalkeeper
Add an article
a goalkeeper
show examples
. Let me introduce myself
first,
my name
Yohanes
Add a missing verb
is Yohanes
show examples
and I am
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
first semester
Add a hyphen
first-semester
show examples
student
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
local
Add an article
a local
the local
show examples
university. I am wondering if your football
club
is amazing for me
according to
my experience because I have 5 years experience as
goalkeeper
Correct article usage
a goalkeeper
show examples
when I study in high school. Unfortunately, my university
has
Verb problem
does
show examples
not football
extracuricular
Correct your spelling
extracurricular
hence
I looking for
football
Correct article usage
a football
show examples
club
surround
Wrong verb form
surrounding
show examples
this
city.
In addition
to
this
, my
rent
Replace the word
rented
show examples
house is not far away from the stadium. So I can practice
everyday
Replace the word
every day
show examples
after my class in college. I do not need to commute earlier as I can use my motorcycle.
Nevertheless
, I am glad that I will get
opportunity
Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
show examples
to join your
club
. I would be thankful if you consider me as the best candidate for your team goalkeeper.
Also
, Would you like
inform
Fix the infinitive
to inform
show examples
me by email about the practice schedule and the cost if I
selected
Add a missing verb
am selected
show examples
?
Thus
, I can prepare
everthing
Correct your spelling
everything
before
join
Change the verb form
joining
show examples
your
club
. Sincerely Yohanes
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Clarity and Directness
Be explicit in the introduction about the primary intent of your letter. Mention directly that you are interested in joining the sports club as a goalkeeper.
Paragraph Structure
Ensure the body paragraphs are well-focused. Each paragraph should clearly tackle a specific aspect of your application or inquiry.
Task Response
Include more detailed inquiries or requests for information regarding the sports club, such as facilities, membership types, or other relevant details to align better with the letter's tasks.
Organization
Your letter is well-organized, and paragraphs are logically structured, which aids the reader's understanding.
Closing
The closing of your letter is polite and clear, effectively summarizing your request and showing eagerness to join the club.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!