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Methods of transportation for people traveling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

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The pie charts illustrate how
people
of
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a
university
 in the UK
traveled
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 to
school
 in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
, there was a considerable decline in the proportion of
people
 going to an examined
university
 by car,
while
 an increase was seen in the figures for the other means of transport.
In addition
, most students chose to commute to their
university
 by car in 2004, and by bus in 2009;
by contrast
, the figures for those opting to take the train or walk to
school
 were marginal/ negligible in both years. The percentage of
people
 driving to the
university
 started at 51% in 2004, after which it almost halved in the next five years. The reverse trend was seen in the proportion of bus riders, which increased from 33% in 2004 to 46% in 2009. 9% of
people
 travelled to the
university
 by bicycle in 2004 (= 9% of
people
 in the survey said that they often cycled to
school
 in 2004), followed by a rise to 16% five years later (after a
half decade
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). Similar changes, but to lesser extents, were seen in the figures for
people
 catching the train or walking to
school
, which increased marginally, reaching 4% and 6%, respectively.
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